||8.00||2005-08-07 23:54:07Aug 7, 2005||I actually found myself drawn into this one more than I would normally allow myself to be for a vampire/zombie story. Mostly well-written with few spelling errors.
The depressing nature and genre of the story do more to hurt it than help, however. Someone that bad off with no human contact around would have killed THEMSELF long before the drawn-out fighting with the vampires. What "pursuit of happiness" can you get in a world like that? (And you honestly expect us to believe this guy would go for the olives before the "smut" mags? Riiiiight.)
I think you'd like a story I read a long time ago entitled "Z for Zachariah" by Robert O'Brien. The protagonist lives on with animal company until she meets someone else, which adds the hook to the story. I think what made it better was that she found happiness and meaning in her pointless life even before the hook, you know? Your story needs a shot in the arm of hope.
Eh, my two cents, anyway.
||9.00||2005-06-13 09:55:16Jun 13, 2005||Without a doubt it's one of the best stories on the site. Very suspenseful, excellent feeling of hopelessness throughout. Good stuff.|
||10.00||2004-12-09 13:47:45Dec 9, 2004||The best story I have read on the site so far. Each room long and actually tells a story. It seems like most other stories get to caught up in exploiting the gimicky notion of changing rooms. I think one of the strengths of the story is the observations and reflections that the protagonist makes about the situation of things. I like the Omega Man inspiration. But I want to see the story move beyond just what I saw in the movie. A question though, how much of this story is based or influenced by the book I Am Legend? I notice that you make the creatures more vampire like than the movie.|
||7.00||2004-11-29 23:57:34Nov 29, 2004||Good, great creepy use of photos, but still fairly incomplete. It's forboding but not suspenseful at this stage (just keep plugging along, and it'll be great!)|
||10.00||2004-11-21 08:07:46Nov 21, 2004||Simply one of the best stories on the sight. Great storyline! You capture the readers attention and draw them into the storyline, you had me wanting to read more and find out who "they" are. Can't wait to read more stories written by you.|
||9.00||2004-11-19 10:35:31Nov 19, 2004||extremely good writing. Only flaw that I could possibly find is that it could use a little explaining.|