The Hell Of Social Interactions
||2.00||2012-05-19 08:36:06May 19, 2012||I understand that you're trying to step outside the norm and avoid certain genres but literature is not a genre.|
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||6.00||2006-08-07 21:47:52Aug 7, 2006||Very funny. Leblanc liked the BBQ bit and Cyclon liked the slutty girl!|
||6.00||2006-08-02 21:27:08Aug 2, 2006||I agree with Usoki. It needs more effort essentially. The biggest issue is it branches off way to quickly to way to many possibilities. Perhaps that is what you are going for though, sort of an Another Monday Morning effect. A stronger beginning would probably have been helpful, it doesn't need to be text heavy but could use a few literary devices. I'll give it a six because it has potential.|
||5.00||2006-08-01 14:45:10Aug 1, 2006||This...is kinda pathetic. There's nothing here. If you were to take this story out of it's CYOA format, you wouldn't even fill up a page. It's a story about a party, and I didn't even get there until five rooms in, because you made up so many ways to get to it!
Your grammar's better than I thought it'd be...but the fact that most of your rooms are little more than a sentence is pathetic.